heh

short and crisp.

it's good, good :)

short, but to the point

This is remarkably profound for being slightly shallow on syntax... While some words are a bit beat (specifically the same pronouns, it kinda adds to the poem, giving it an impersonal feel where it may have become sappy. Don't overuse this style however, as it give a hard edge to your prose. Excellent work (and it is short... god.. I like brief and intellegent poetry)

This is a bit odd, but interesting. I liked the bluntness really. Good job.