lawl, this story really needs a beta reader/sditor. and i mean really
the grammar is all messed and the spelling and tenses are mixed.
but i love the idea of the story, and thats why im BEGGING you to get a beta reader/sditor to edit this.

its an ok story, but edited? this would be AWESOME
please, consider it

youre awesome
ciao
Sam

okay *tear*...that was a nice story

omg i have never read a femmeslash story before this is my first ha ha im no longer a virgin when it comes to femmeslash anyway lol this story was great im glad you wrote it because a lot of the femmeslsh stories be stupid on here thats why i never read one but this one was so realistic anyway you a great writer continue wirting many and many of story buh-bye! ;)

Nice simple ending.

very good story it actually had me feeling sorry for the characters as if they were real ppl

Hella awesome that i got my own personal apology, but there was no need to apologize this chapter was worth the wait just to see where the relationship is going. Can't really relate to this chapter cause I havent been dominated before or thought about it but still keep it up, update soon.

A lot of drama going on. Update soon man.

Awesome story, keep it up man

Can't wait to see exactly what is going to be taught, update soon

i like this so far. please update soon. :D

I'd like to see more of this, hope to see an update soon