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| RedWheeler 2007-08-16 ch 1,  | abuseHappy Birthday Al! Sorry I couldn't go to your party, but I hope you had a great time and got a ton of cool presents. Tell me all about it next time we're both on msn or something. Anyways, to the matter at hand... I can't believe nobody has reviewed this yet. I thought it was one of your best. I particularly loved the lines: "Strive for the hollow accomplishments, I held so high above me! Die for the heartbroken lyrics, For the things I never wanted to be!" The ending was also very good, and I liked the touch of going from ellipses to phrases like 'For you' and 'The same', I thought those were great. All in all, it's yet another song to join my extensive list of favourites. Great job! |