... wow. Very.. Discriptive. I enjoyd it!

I read the first chapter. This story has serious potential. However, I think there was too much information given too fast. I would have liked a better idea of the characters before jumping into the situation with the queen. I hadn't known the characters very well so I really didn't care that Rye was being chained, nor did I care what was going to happen to him.

Aw. I liked it. A lot. But I was just sorta rooting for Zydiel. Wait. Was that his name? Lareil is so hot and the domination and S&M was amazing. But you just still feel so bad for Zydiel. Maybe it'd been better if he had had a duel with Lareil. Then at least that would have been taken care of. I liked both their relationships. The story overall is short and sweet...or spicy. As in HOT, haha. But I just wish there had of been a little more. But one thing that I loved about this story was the way that it wasn't the whole Cinderella thing. With the evil stepmother being overthrown and everything. It's rather ironic that Rye's father had beat Lareil to the crown and then subsequently married his sister. You'd have thought that Lareil would be a bit angrier at Rye. But. It was pretty good. And just a comment. You're amazing with the sex scenes. I think I said that in my other review too but I just thought I'd say. You're a good writer.

Hm...it tells too much and shows too little.

HOTT!

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Oh my! I know Rye has to be tired! Good descriptions.

PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what will happen next.