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| lilhelplessaznwithabigheart 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseaw...i never imagined tat a simple merry go round could be the start to someone's love life...tat was so sweet! |
| masterful me 2008-01-25 ch 1, | abuseI love merry-go-rounds! And the fluffier, the better. For now (I like my angst too). This just made my day. Thanks! |
| concerto49 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseHeya. Concerto. Guess this could have had more description - there was just too much dialogue that made it a bit like a play more. Could have dived in more to the emotions/thoughts/feelings of the characters. Explain things a bit more - more detail. It was sweet and soft. Hm. Reminds me of when I was young. Other than that it was cool. Anyhow. Cheers. |
| twinklee 2007-08-17 ch 1, | abuseAw, it was short but it was so sweet! yeah i basically melted :] |
| ihrtbks 2007-08-13 ch 1, | abuseAw...the magic of the carnival. Makes me wonder exactly what their relationship was before the kiss. One small thing though, you switch tenses at the end; it should be "we never forgot". GREAT JOB! |
| SisterBear 2007-08-13 ch 1, | abuseThis was really cute. I enjoyed reading it. I liked how it ended with them married and watching their children play. This was really good ~SisterBear~ |