Reviews for Scream Bloody Murder

Reviews For: Scream Bloody Murder

Litheral 2007-11-15 ch 1,	abuseYou know all my life what I read has been fueled by a vivid imagination. An imagination fueled by bits of terror, horror, and gore that I unwillingly witnessed on the television. (with a friend. scoff I would never watch it alone) I don't enjoy watching things really scary like Saw but it is those very bits that I have seen that manage to creep out of my brain and scare the crp out of me when I read pieces like this. The very end is just the style to be creepy. However, I think with a bit more work, you could make this more descriptive, and put some depth into it. With a little shining you could make this very suspenseful. Loved your ending!
Cal Kain 2007-08-22 ch 1,	abuseWow, thats really good. keep writing more to it.
Jason Maxwell 2007-08-15 ch 1,	abuseI love it! Great story line! Good Job!
Alexandria Smith 2007-08-14 ch 1,	abuseCreepy... but I would have liked for it to be longer... its just such a good story line, haha, well it was great! Hehe, I was the first to hear this story straight after it was done. mwahahahaha! Yes, the power of the first! don't ask me what I mean by that... I don't have an answer... Dear lord, this is what happens to me when I stay up and get hysteric obsessing over that book! haha, overall it was really cool! Your best scary story yet I think, besides some of the ones you wrote when I was over... Great job, keep it up chum!
Call.It.Karma 2007-08-14 ch 1,	abuseThat was freaky! Keep going!
Born Restless 2007-08-14 ch 1,	abuseOh, how horror movie-esque. The poor children. The name Nightwalker reminds me of a werewolf or vampire. I'm very curious about what the creature is and the future of the story. Nice Work.
concerto49 2007-08-14 ch 1,	abuse"All the girls laughed as the reminisced over" - they? “Have you ever heard how to play Bloody Murder?” - heard of? Um the first paragraph seems a touch bunched. There's dialogue and bits and pieces - separate it. Needs more in-depth description. Try to set the scene more - it's meant to be horrifical and scary, so add in images of that. Build in suspense to add to the horror, like say in between the dialogue. Add in effects from the environment and all. Explore the characters more - more to their reaction to the situation, and their emotions/feelings. It's just the atmosphere and the mood that's slightly lacking. Perhaps slow things down a touch. Stall a little and make people think. Anyhow. Cheers.
daisy dreams. 2007-08-14 ch 1,	abuseSO FREAKY! but super good. and super short. i really liked it, it was great. ~ Abby

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