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| Neko-samaXIII 2007-12-06 ch 2,  | abuseOk, just for the record I'm NOT trying to chew ya out or anything just I think you should have added more...um whats the word I'm looking for uh build mabey? Cuz it really has no build at all, I say the story has good plot just you seemed to jump into introing the scary monster and you barely put any disription to um Jason was it? So over all its a good story, it just needs a little work :) -Dg1o1 |
| Justine Wells 2007-08-15 ch 2, | abuseThis story is actually pretty cool. I likey! lol! I want 2 see where this is going. Welcome to the Writing World! |
| Luna Turner 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abusehm... I'm interested to see where this is going. I would love to read the next chapter, but I think you should make this one a prologue. It's not long enough to be a chapter. Update soon!! ~Kat |