FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| Ashelin 2007-08-14 ch 1,   | Seperate thoughts, all put into one. Though I think you could be more fluid in the transitions, I still like it. Maybe you meant for it to be that way. Great job. |