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| Needa S 2007-10-26 ch 1,  | abuseNot only is it beautiful but it is an excellent write. |
| simpleplan13 2007-10-24 ch 1, | abuseI love the line "your chromatic smile" and the clock metaphor was awesome |
| glimpses from an ivory towe... 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseIt is beyond me how I have you on my author alert list, yet I never reviewed you back. Sorry this is so long in coming. "your chromatic smile" Such marvelous imagery. I love the metaphor of ever-playing music box and endless devotion. "while whispers of my melody (endless repeat) travels through the passage of time." A beautiful ending. |
| plummet 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is simply beautiful...A wonderful comparison. Your ideas are endless. ^^ |
| jojoba-music-girl 2007-08-22 ch 1, | abuseWow, this was really amazing! I just love, love, love this! If I had a favourite-of-my-favourites-list, I'd definetely put this poem in there. Unfortunately, that doesn't excist, so you'd have to do with just my normal-favourite-list ;-) Write on, I'll check it out! |
| whispered something profoun... 2007-08-22 ch 1, | abusei love the way you connect saying i love you to music. this has a lot of nice imagery. thank you for reviewing my poem! |
| Arcane D. 2007-08-21 ch 1, | abuseit sure has been a while. in my eyes, your poetry has become much more poignant, concise and subtle. i enjoyed this piece. hope to see you update soon. - a.d. |
| Charity F 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseI. LOVE. IT. |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-08-16 ch 1, | abuseSo spiritual and beautiful but silent at the same time. I love the association with music. It's just so wow...so pretty. -C.N |
| Aquafied 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abusei have never heard something so silent, so well. |
| The Postscript 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abuseReally wonderful. I especially like the imagery assosiated with "chromatic smile" and the other ways in which you incorporate music terms into the body of the poem, sometimes in an abstract way. "to the beat/of a steady clock" has the possibility of a variety of interpretation, such as your music somehow, in an abstract way, makes the clock tick to its beat or vice versa. It really sets up a great lead and flow to the end, in which you mention this idea of an eternal song . . . one which never really ends. I also find it interesting you pair "lightly" and "passion" together because one normally thinks of passion as this excessive love for something, while that excessiveness seperates "passion" from merely liking something. If you have a passion, you devulge your soul into it. But I think that well summarizes this poem - light on the surface with real soul and heart deep within. Keep writing, k. |
| heresyisforlosers 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abuseanother beautiful poem. =) sunny |
| The-Supervisor 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abuseI agree the wording in this one is really well done. I enjoyed these lines the most: a statement of your devotion to the chorus of your emotion They seem to incorporate the emotion the best into the music theme. Definitely my favourite among your recent work ^_^ |
| Nick Weisman 2007-08-14 ch 1, | abusethis is beautifully worded. absolutely astounding. i love the words you use, how you use them and just the wonderful picture you paint with them. wonderful |
| Ashelin 2007-08-14 ch 1, | abuseAh, I so love references to music in poetry. There was something undeniably pretty in this, not sure how to describe it. The words kind of flowered. Good job. |