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| simpleplan13 2008-06-01 ch 1,  | abuseyour quote needs a comma in between more and the quotation mark. I have to say I didn't like that quote though because I know it was meant about the road but after reading the first line I thought you meant sleep since that's what a lot of people say.. lol. Anyhow I liked the piece. It made some really great points that everyone can relate to. I especially liked the line about dreams and goals meeting. |
| lonely silhouette 2008-05-29 ch 1, | abuseLove it! Just tinker with this line: "Me who’s catching for breath" Otherwise, I really liked it! --A Raindrop's Shadow |
| sweetdimples 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseneat poem |
| Free2Dream 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abuseI'm not very good with poetry but I can at least say one thing, this is well written. It makes me wonder about the meaning behind it, possibly about a dream one is chasing and how they are unsure of their ending success or final destination. :-) |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-11 ch 1, | abuseyou're very descriptive. I love the sense of desperate hope in your poem. |
| BahamutsTear 2008-04-10 ch 1, | abuseGreat image filled with deep subtext on life. |
| ruby ruby ruby 2008-04-09 ch 1, | abuseI really like this, sort of bittersweet. |
| Princess-anna57 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseGreat job. I like this a lot. Keep writing. ~Anna~ |