i love it, please updqate this story as well! =]

intense & original! =] I'm listening Anna! I'm listening! =]

Please write more! I love journal-stories. This subject is truly important.

OMG! I just tried to send a review and then the cpu messed up and now I have to rewrite the review. Oy vai!

Anyways, I'm very happy to be the first to review this story of yours.

Compliments:
- I can see you have a nice little plot going on here.
- Nice somewhat backdrop of the character.
- Kept me reading.
- Not boring.
_ Good job on working on a hard subject for many to deal with and trying to be comical while keeping the drama.
- Polyester girl was kinda funny. ^_^

Disappointers:
- Grammar
- Check the emotion of the piece
- Too quirky...
- Needs more sarcasm to fit the genre and what it is about to be more realistic.
- The girl's suicidal-ness isn't exactly the most believable
- Too rushed

Grammar:
- Some words were missing in some parts
- Some sentences had to be rechecked over and over to understand what you were trying to say
- Missing things that cause for pause (,) among other things.
- Fix the grammar of the summary... many will think you're lazy and won't read it because of the missing capitalization.

Originality:
- From what I've read on FP, this is very original.

Characterization:
- Kinda nice characterization of main
- Very good on supporting characters.

Believability:
- Somewhat believable

Suggestions:
- Get a beta
- I could be your beta

Overall Thoughts:
- I liked your story... it was very nice, easy to enjoy.
- Just needs a few things fixed...

I went into much more detail before but this sums up everything in a neater way. ^_^ Hope this helps!