Reviews for You Look So Good In Blue

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Overwhelming Screams 2008-03-26 ch 5,	abuseHey! pretty tense chapter, Shellzie! it was worth waiting roughly half a year for.
sambuddyels 2008-03-26 ch 5,	abuseI think you did a great job. i'm also glad to know that you're back writing again. Keep up the good work.
WebOfLiezzz 2008-03-26 ch 5,	abuseThe beginning of this chapter was great but I think you got lazy at the end, eh? I don't know what, but you should have added something else before ending this chapter. But great work anyways! =)
Laeden 2008-03-25 ch 1,	abuseOne thing I noticed is how your character kind of just explicitly says everything about her. Instead of just saying "I'm a loner," it'd be much more powerful to actually show it. A day at school would show this. Have a few people snub her off, and she just kind of looks half-hurt and says "who needs friends, anyway?" You have a lot of potential content. I say that, meaning that you have a lot here that needs to be elucidated on. You need to let your readers get to know the character themselves. Imagine one of your closest friends moving away. And you want your friend to experiance what it was like to know her. Would it be as effective to tell your friend about her, or would it be more meaningful if your friend actually knew her? Same thing with Dax and your other characters. It's nice as an author to assume that your readers will pick up on everything that you subtely hint at. So you can show how the characters are through your writing, and it's much more effective as a tool. That way, your readers can get to know the characters and love them or hate them, and those are the emotional responses you want. And you can't obtain them just by telling someone how your characters are. Also, your transition to the flashback seems sketchy, like it's an "easy-going" way to transition from one point in time to the next. Just putting "Flashback" and "end Flashback" seems like a cop-out, and halts your narrative--your flow. ~Laeden
Kayesar 2007-11-02 ch 4,	abusehey! nice ending...it's so...you! Anyways, good luck in getting into the 'zone' as you call it and good chapters so far. Keep it up :D
soojinyeh 2007-11-01 ch 3,	abusethis story has been nominated for a 2007 Fiction Award for Favorite Villain: The Red Eyed Guy from You Look So Good in Blue by Tucking Fypo. For more info, please go to my forums.
katherine haynes 2007-10-31 ch 4, anon.	abusewow, how's she going to get out of this one? actually...how is damon going to help?
katherine haynes 2007-10-31 ch 3, anon.	abusewow, i have no clue if this guy is good or bad...i love this!
WebOfLiezzz 2007-10-30 ch 3,	abuseOh my god! The first person to die! Well I couldn't think of someone more who deserved it, Jade bullied Jordan.
WebOfLiezzz 2007-10-30 ch 2,	abuseThis chapter isn't bad. You just need to make it flow more.
WebOfLiezzz 2007-10-30 ch 1,	abuseIt's so sad that Jay died.
sambuddyels 2007-10-30 ch 4,	abuseI love this chapter! But it really sucks that Jordan had to go to jail.
Padmik 2007-10-28 ch 4,	abuseOOMG, that sucks for her! Damon could have at least helped her out... like you story btw! Now i'm starting to wonder what Damon is, but I have a thought.
Peachie Miss 2007-09-09 ch 3,	abuseOh shiznit. Can't wait for the next chap.
Forgottenunloved 2007-09-09 ch 3,	abuseFANTASTIC CHAPTER! can't wait for the next update! i rarley reveiw, but this story is so damn addicting im going to actually BEG for a update! love your story. love the plot. love the author. love freaking everything!

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