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| Twilight Starr 2008-03-28 ch 8,  | abusePoor Gracie. Have a brilliant day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Chiika 2008-03-28 ch 8, | abuseyeah its pretty good, I wonder what'll happen next. I think chapters 1 - 8 should've been one whole chapter. Your chapters are short. But it's a good story. There's this one thing about your style that seems blockish or something dunno. But I really like it ♥ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-02-07 ch 7, | abuseNice addition. Good job! Have an excellent day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Lola Summer 2008-02-04 ch 7, anon. | abuseHey there. I just love reading your story and I think it is extemely well written. the story is realistic and suspenseful and not at all corny. i love reading and always have my nose in a book. I have always dreamed of writing my own story and yours might just be the one that inspires me. please don't stop |
| Cowboy Wayne 2008-02-04 ch 7, anon. | abuseIt is getting better and better. It grabs your attention at the beginning and then leaves you hanging, wanting more. I can't wait for the next chapter. |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-19 ch 6, | abuseGood thing she has Max to help her out. Nice work. Have a lovely day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-13 ch 5, | abuseIt's good she escaped. Nice work. Have an excellent day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Cowboy Wayne 2008-01-12 ch 5, | abuseWow. This story is getting better and better. I can not wait for the next chapter. I can not wait to find out where Max takes Gracie. |
| XxsaraxmariexX 2007-11-19 ch 4, | abuseI really like it! I'm favoriting it...I hope to read more soon! |
| Daigaisai-Taren 2007-11-19 ch 4, | abuseI really like this, it's well written and engaging. However, there's a pretty serious factual error. No one HAD to tell her parents, in fact, if she's over 13, it was illegal for them to tell her parents anything without her written consent. Children's hospitals sometimes overlook this, particularly with physically smaller teenagers, but counselors rarely do. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-11-18 ch 4, | abuseAww, Max seems like a really sweet guy. Hopefully he'll get her help. Good addition. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-11-18 ch 3, | abuseWell written chapter. Poor Gracie. Someone needs to report her father. I hope there is a happy ending for her in the works. Have a lovely day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Frostany 2007-11-18 ch 3, | abuseThis story is going in very interesting directions. I like the character of Gracie and I can really identify with her as I've struggled with suicidal impulses and attempts, and I was abused for five years. I think you did a very good job of developing Gracie's character and also her father's. I think one way too make your already great story even better is if you introduce even more hints of the abuse earlier in the story. I do like the way you don't know fully about the abuse unitl the third chapter, it seems to work well for your story. I hope you write more soon, I'm very interested to find out what happens to Gracie next. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-10-11 ch 2, | abuseGreat chapter. Good job revealing more about your main character. Personally I would never use my character's name as the story title because it makes an okay title, doesn't really catch a reader's attention, and the reader knows nothing about your character so it doesn't mean anything to them. But it's okay if you do although you want a better title because it helps your story. Good job. Have a wonderful day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-08-17 ch 1, | abuseInteresting start. The story has potential. ~Twilight Starr~ |