|Reviews for Beyond the Universe|
| lili999 5/28/10 . chapter 1
Cheap retail watch, sunglasses, belt, hats/caps, High quality T-shirts,
ED hardy t-shirts,ED Hardy hoodies,ED hardy ,Jeans,GUCCI shoes,LV Handbag,Chanel
Handbag…high quality,low to
| EmoAngelChan 11/2/08 . chapter 15
Hi, it's me! xD I feel like it's been so long since I last reviewed...
I have to know- Are we gonna see more of Shin? I thought he was interesting. The Shin/Christine/Raymond love triangle is more interesting than the Christine/Raymond/Natalie one...
btw, regarding chapter 14, it seemed ooc for Raymond to force himself on Christine like that.
| VanG Ziggy ZA 6/9/08 . chapter 1
| EmoAngelChan 5/18/08 . chapter 13
I don't know why, but I really liked this chapter...the imagery was really well-done and really beautiful... (does this mean that Sean's really an angel...?)
| Melissa Norvell 4/27/08 . chapter 13
A beautifully written chapter I can't wait to see what the next one will hold!
| EmoAngelChan 4/2/08 . chapter 12
I really liked this chapter! It was really well written and it was really sad. ...I'm not very good at giving actual good reviews stating why I liked something...but I can say that you really are talented at writing.
| Melissa Norvell 3/29/08 . chapter 12
I really liked this chapter even though it seemed short but perhaps that's just because It had a lot of dialouge in it. It's good to see you updating again!
| badamm 2/18/08 . chapter 4
Ok very nice. A new character spirit illuminates, Mark the older brother of Christine, perhaps a guardian angel, or the real brother that she prays to in her most inner most moments of solitude, it is inconclusive at this point in the story. Nevertheless, the author punctuates it with a riviting song from a modern tenor ascribing to either and, then, cataclysmically askes,“Tell me…Why am I still here?”
Forlorn and forsaken, bereft and introverted, destitute and as despairing of a plea as ever could be uttered when one can only imagine the Gates of Heaven is this question as posed. In this case, the Gates of Heaven are closed because there is no revelry or reason to hear these unhappy self-torments. Thus, making a statement for "Unanswered Prayers."
Excellent suspense tool, one that just binds up readers in the character's thoughts, as well as, their own.
| badamm 2/18/08 . chapter 3
Good character development is deployed in this chapter as Raymond, Natalie and Shin start emerging in this drama; though the plot remains conspicuously shrouded. Maybe the Author is curtaining this as she develops the plot or maybe more of the characters will unfold this as the story continues, on that we will have to see. A dark chapter that perculates with more of what's to come...
Point of interest: An unathored prose arising from the unbeknownest. Christine's dream? Raymond's tears making jabbing words? Shin's world? Natalie's insurrection? A striation of the moment? This reviewer is unsure, though pleasantly surprised of how this beguiling short few words of unrequited love interjected itself in the overall mix of the story. Eyebrow-raising.
Plans for improvement: Please review & implement some grammar rules such as the "i" before "e" , quotation marks and past, present, future participle rules.
Overall: Thanks I liked it and will turn the page to the next chapter..
| Melissa Norvell 2/16/08 . chapter 11
A short but interesting chapter! Great job!
| badamm 1/5/08 . chapter 1
Very Impressive and nice use of keeping the reader in suspense by not knowing what the black object, finally shown her, but not to the reader, is. Left hungry for this knowledge, the reader is assured more pages are forthcoming. Excellent chapter building.
A/n: there are some [very few] grammer issues, mainly regarding usage of subject, verb. Also, review the comma, semi-colon and colon rules and reread.
Overall: This tale is, so far, exciting, drama intensive & a love story unfolding from the story teller's POV [point of view], enlisting its readers to keep turning the pages, and we will.
| Twilight Hoshiko-chan 12/16/07 . chapter 1
hm...interesting -sweetly described but it seemed a little random and rushed.*sweatdrop* i'm not the kindest reviewer... but still i find that this is a cool plotline. good job!
| EmoAngelChan 11/30/07 . chapter 10
Don't worry, you didn't offend me in any way!
Sean seems like an interesting character. I kinda like Christine better with Shin (they really do seem to care for each other, deeply).
A cliffhanger... usually I find that annoying, but it works out in most chapters.
| Melissa Norvell 11/12/07 . chapter 9
An interesting chapter indeed. Oh and your welcome, I rather enjoy this piece, and I hope that you enjoy Sacrifice as well (I've updated by the by. If you want to read my newest chapter, go for it. I like your feedback)
Keep doing a wonderful job!
Until next chapter!
| EmoAngelChan 10/30/07 . chapter 8
The last paragraph was beautiful. I liked the conversation that Raymond and Shin had, but I don't really like the idea that Shin and Christine had a cyber relationship... I think if they were past lovers, it would have been... better probably. Because, the love the two of them share seem more like former lovers who are still in love with one another. But overrall, it was a good chapter.