Nicely written. Though I say the ending part is kind of ended in a rush in my opinion. You did not touch how this new revelation that he was also adopted affected how he thinks now. Then again... you didn't actually wrote in any mention of time in a very specific way. As in... I wonder if the rest of the adopted children were taken in the same year or more. What age would Jared be at the end of the story?

This would affect how he will act or view the world. Because by the way the fiction goes, it seemed Jared had jumped from being a 5 year old to 15. Oh wait, I've reread the piece. This is written as a flashback, isn't it? Hmm... But I still find it jarring since you hadn't really stated which part of it is a flashback, which of it is in the present. Things like that can make a reader confused over the flow of time in this.

Other than that, a bit more thoughts on how Jared handled the fact that he was also adopted might also make the fic better. Because the way a teen or a child view that fact in their perspective is different. I think if you wanted to show how Jared had matured after learning of this truth, inserting what was his thoughts on being adopted as well as how it changed his opinions about his other adopted siblings would have strengthen the theme you wanted to portray in this piece.

My two cents that become two ringgit. XP