Reviews for Truthful Deception

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Bookwormstrangly 2008-09-23 ch 25,	abuseso far i am abslutly in love with this story. I cant beilieve cade is part of the council..does bridget know? Please update soon!
Kaikie 2008-09-17 ch 25,	abuseYAY! Sorry I took so long to reply...school, you know. :P But you did a good job on this chapter. I liked how you created the portal from one world to the other without any weird voodoo stuff going on. It was simple, easy to explain, but difficult to do. But how was she able to convince Cade so easily? If he were really ** at her wouldn't he just force her back through to her own world? Keep up the good work! :) Kaikie
Kyrina 2008-09-08 ch 25,	abusebrilliant! i live this story! its a really interesting subject... please update soon!!
Kaikie 2008-08-20 ch 24,	abuseHey again. :) Sorry about slow replies...:P Not feeling very good for a while... But you did a good job on this chapter. I liked the part with Jen the most. Very dramatic-friend like. Sorry I don't have much to say, but I really have to type and run this time :( Keep up the good work! Kaikie
Kaikie 2008-08-08 ch 23,	abuseHey again :) Good job on this chapter. There were a few gramatical errors, but they weren't too noticable. I was wondering, though, why wouldn't Bridget at least know what "food" tasted like? I mean, she goes to school and all, wouldn't she eat in the cafeteria? Also, the diner isn't all that cheap...the bugers must have been crazy-good or had a GIGANTIC serving of fries for three meals to cost up near 30 dollars. The restraunt I work at would only cost somewheres near 20-ish dollars, and it's not the least expensive one in town. Good job, though, with Jen. The interaction was good, and you got her actions great...the whole table thing. I think that the whole ordeal right at the end, including Nicoles mom, was very well figured out. :) Keep up the good work. Kaikie
Kaikie 2008-07-30 ch 22,	abuseWonderful! It almost made ME cry. :( You really tied up all the ends, explained everything. Great job. I really loved this chapter. Kaikie
CreativebutLazy 2008-07-24 ch 1,	abusehey I thought your name sounded familiar, you reviewed my story Millimeia. Well consider this returning the favor. Very nicely done, I'm already liking the voice you gave your character.
Zeful 2008-07-22 ch 21,	abuseThings are getting interesting again, I like that Claire isn't just following orders anymore, but giving them. And I must say that Connor's disbelief is too great, as if he has something to hide on his own. Wonder what it is.
Kaikie 2008-07-21 ch 21,	abuseYou're getting better. Much better. You're writing in more detail and the characters have better dialog. Great job. Wouldn't the slashes on the tires be kinda strange? Who would put four slashes in the same tire? You only need one...or does it just confuse and add to the mystery? As for the rabbit, wouldn't it be able to change into a mouse or something to get out? Keep up the good work! Kaikie
TheOnyxKeyMaster 2008-07-21 ch 1,	abuseIt most certainly needs work and length. But it was ok i suppose dosent make it in with my 100 fav stories I've read (that was not u know published) most likely with something I would not care to ever read again. I'll forget it in an hour. srry
ohthevoices 2008-07-17 ch 1,	abuseThere was nothing glaringly wrong that I could see, just a couple of times when you switched tenses. It was interesting, because you kept alluding to what's going to happen in the story without saying exactly what happened, making us want to read more and find out what actually happens.
Zeful 2008-07-15 ch 20,	abuseA good chapter, sorry I missed out on the last one, my hotmail didn't seem to get the alert e-mail. Overall this chapter is good, I wonder what Travis will think when his changeling buddy comes home? Keep it up I like this story.
Kaikie 2008-06-30 ch 19,	abuseHey again. :) Good job, everything is coming together...but one question...wouldn't she have noticed if the dog was acting so strangely? ah well. I hope that the boys are actually what she thinks them to be...otherwise Bridget's gonna be ma-ad. and as for Nicole...I can understand her anger, but wouldn't she be smarter than to be mad for long? I mean, Claire's only looking out for her. Great job, though. It's a lot of material to comment on, so you'll have to wait for a more in-depth one on the next chapter! Happy writing! Kaikie
wolfblood82 2008-06-24 ch 11,	abuseHeya there! Sorry for the belated review. I think you know what's going on if you've seen my profile. Anyway, interesting chapter here concerning Bridget. Her entire agenda seems rather interesting. And I wonder what's her relationship with Claire given her reactions towards her. The whole protection issue is interesting as well as in I wonder what Bridget meant by that. and the whole scene of Claire and Connor is rather well done as well. Reminds me of the standard romance novel lol! XD Anyway, thanks for your recent review on Circles of Arven. Hope to see more of the reviews for it soon! ^^ Bye! :)
wolfblood82 2008-06-17 ch 10,	abuseWell, I guess this is the last review I'll be doing for the day, so you should be glad lol! XD Anyway, interesting chapter here with all the personal issues for Claire here. I'll have to say though that this chapter seems like a filler to me, but no complaints on that. :) Anyway, I guess it must have sucks to be Claire given the issues with Connor and getting grounded. Anyway, interesting issue of Bridget being mentioned here. I do agree that going "ok, I know your secret" kind of reason won't do a single hoot to letting Bridget saying out everything lol! :D Anyway, nothing to complain here. Good chapter here and yeah, hope to see your reviews for Circles of Arven soon! ^^ Bye! :)

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