| Reviews for Forget Happiness |
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Definition 9/2/07 . chapter 1Ahh. I can relate fully, completely. The a/n adds a new twist/dimension to the haiku. It's a like a child who's finally grown up. He stops doing childlike things, and tries to be more mature, to be part of the new teenage popularity crowd. But yet, there's still a small part of him who still wants to be young, to be able to have a shoulder to lean on, to be happy and carefree, to do those childlike things. Nice! |
tearing hands 8/26/07 . chapter 1Nice haiku. Sad, though. I think you have to hope that some day you'll deserve happiness and have it because otherwise life is just too bleak. |
Basara 8/20/07 . chapter 1a good start here... you may learn and appreciate things that one doesn't expect, beg, nor want... ( to have ) nice! |
All Alone With Her Thoughts 8/19/07 . chapter 1Oh, don't think that. You deserve happiness. Nice haiku. Rowan. |
Ye'mawa 8/19/07 . chapter 1Very nice. Strong emotion, 100% relatable. |
sweets555 8/18/07 . chapter 1unless you are a child rapist-murderer-nazi, you deserve it. well written though, even if i dont agree |
Chidori Nadare 8/18/07 . chapter 1Someone asking for things they cannot have but they can't have them. I could definitely relate. Good job! -C.N |
Nonya Soum 8/18/07 . chapter 1Simple and I like it. I can relate 100%. Your haiku puts into the simplest words something I'm sure several other people feel also (not like in "The Pursuit of Happyness" though). Great job! Write on! |