Helloo... I think it's sweet kind of story... hehehe!

Hm I think you need to wrok on the who speak what... because I was having trouble figuring out who said what... remember both of them are male so using he and he in the next line can confuse people...

I love your story so far. Its really interesting and I love the random mood swings. I can't wait for the next one, keep up the good work.