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| Femaleking 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is a beautiful poem, the third stanza is my favourite. The imagery is wonderful yet slightly macabre. I like the last line, and how you've put it into brackets and italicised it, which makes it stand out and in a way seperates it from the rest of the poem (if that makes sense). |
| tearing hands 2007-08-26 ch 1, | abuse"Their mouths bleed broken secrets." That's my favorite line. Beautiful. |
| nvt4g 2007-08-20 ch 1, | abuseayos 'to, ganda |
| Basara 2007-08-20 ch 1, | abuseanswered lies and questionable lies... nice... |
| Kusje 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuse'The real truth behind the truth, For their lips are filled With taboo crimson roses' My favorite part of the haiku -- You did such a great job. I have no critiques, this is a beautiful haiku :) *favoriting!* |
| xDancingintheRainx 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. Its beautiful. I like the last two stanzas best and the ending is perfect. Great job. |