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| A.R. Mouse 2007-10-18 ch 1,  | abuseSo sad and so pretty. Very well written. I love the idea of catching the moonlight, since most people would think of catching sunlight instead. Good job, keep it up. +MOUSE |
| Ashelin 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is sad. In the end the tragedy seems almost intentional, like because the girl believed herself to be so unworthy she forced the moonlight away from her. It was a good poem, and interesting thought. The title kind of threw me off because I was thinking about the other type of moonshine. Haha. Good job. |
| Nonya Soum 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful imagery and a great story! So bittersweet and light too. I like how you use moonlight to represent a type of filler or distraction for/from the faults. It's a beautiful object to use and makes for a better picture. Poetry portraying real life with objects and literal applications are great, but I think metaphors are fantastic. Anyway, I like it!! Fantastic job!! Write on!! |
| perpetual questions 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseInteresting concept. I like it. Great job as always. |