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MacKitty 2008-07-07 ch 1,	abusehahaha, yeah, it's a bit rough--practice will take care of that. but other than that, it was cute. especially ian. the ending seriously cracked me up. :D i think my favorite part is when ryan's like 'you are such a brat.' but yeah, keep writing!
Amindaya 2008-06-03 ch 1,	abuseGreat! I love the details about the show, and the way they misunderstood each other. And Michael totally pulled a Solomon there. Lovely story.
Sobran 2008-02-04 ch 1, anon.	abuseI have a weakness for hate2love plots. Your oneshot is so funny and cute! I read with a grin on my face the whole time. Nice job.
iwishillwilluponyou 2007-12-04 ch 1,	abuseah so cute ^_^ fangasm
HaPpYGuRl 2007-11-25 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis was the first time that i read something like this[along the lines of a TV show!]and it was very well-written!...cutE :)
failte200 2007-11-13 ch 1,	abusehe! "He was either fascinated by his own crotch or texting someone" - that was great. So was Ian "thanking the coffee-table for miraculously providing him with water". And the premise was good too. Now see - my way of doing things would've been to let the reader know right off that they were mistaken about each other, and then watch them continue to do so for awhile, but considering it, your way worked better for this story. I must try to keep that in mind. You did resolve the angst awfully quickly though - after spending quite a while building it up... but I know how that goes, especially when you're shooting for a short one-shot, rather than a multi-chapter epic. And I must have missed the part where Ian initially asked Ryan out... maybe it was too subtle for me. :) But I like how Ryan - from Nebraska - thought a pink shirt automatically marked him as gay, whereas to LA-Ian, it meant no such thing. Long review eh? Oh, and I think you should italicize people's thoughts, rather than single-quote them. But maybe that's just me. Anyway - good story. Aw!
Spoodle 2007-11-12 ch 1,	abuseOh, you have no idea how awesome [and difficult] it is to find a good-quality (slash) one-shot round' here. I thought I had reviewed this one before but after re-reading I realized, 'Cheesenips, I haven't left some feedback!' Sides', it would be a sin not reviewing such an original piece. Because it is indeed, very original. Your a remarkable writer, [I know flattery gets you nowhere but this situation calls for it], - the characters are wonderfully portrayed and very easy to become attached to, even in such a short time interval. [I only wish there was more for me to feed on]. Ian's childish nature and Ryan's merciless temper really make an uber dynamic combo. God Bless you, child. You have taken the elements of hate/love relationships, misunderstandings, and biting dialogues to the next dimension. You've glorified my day. Its completely selfish of me but, would you write more one-shots? Maybe dig up one of those itchy plots that you think don't have any potential when in actuality they are the next big thing since sliced bread? Yeah. I know you got them. And Yeah, get yourself that bigger belt. :]
j.d. egan 2007-10-08 ch 1,	abuseI'm so looking forward reading more of your stories. I thought this is so funny and cute. I like it a lot.
DEwy 2007-09-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseThat makes me want to watch this show so much. Gawd, you are an amazing writer. I was hooked right from the start of the story and the ending is sweet. It makes me wanna read another chapter but this time from Ian's perspective &hinthint&.
Lerene 2007-09-14 ch 1,	abusegreat oneshot. I really liked it. "... if I could get away with it I’d take my jeans off too!” That would be pretty hot to see, but I doubt any male that works with power tools would take their pants off. They may lose something. he he. great story
magalina 2007-09-08 ch 1,	abuseAw, that was too cute :) They were both adorable. Great job!
Momoro 2007-09-03 ch 1,	abuse-laughs- now I kinda want to know how Ian could have asked him out without Ryan realizing. XD
Sixkiller 2007-08-31 ch 1,	abuseThis was so cute! It started a little slow, but I loved the ending! ^^
Kailum 2007-08-26 ch 1,	abuseInsanely cute XD I loved the whole... 'i asked you out and you said no!' 'wtf no you didn't!' 'yes i did' so awesome XD I was like ROFL =P Cute one-shot, WRITE MORE PLZ. KTHXBAI :P
mandraco 2007-08-20 ch 1,	abuseLol. Hey, I love lifestyle shows. My favourite channel is Discovery Home and Health, followed by the food channel, and the lifestyle channel... but of course, it's not like I watch them all day every day. Anyway, I liked the story, but I wanted more elaboration on how Ian asked Ryan out and Ryan didn't know. =) Mandraco.

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