so has Yoshie lost her virginity? so confused! what happend that night?!

An interesting two chapters. I like how you're developing out the characters.

As a fellow manga-ka, I can tell you that I'm not good with writing things that were at first pictorialized. It's very hard at times to write out characters actions or the looks on their faces. Anime faces tend to be hard to describe at times, especially those which have been exaggerated as in forms of extreme anger or happiness.

You, however, have good form and description. I applaud you on that my friend.

This is a very interesting piece. I do hope that you'll continue this. I'm really caught up the relationships in this piece. As a fellow aspiring manga-ka, I wish you luck on the manga part of this.

Perhaps, if you have the time, you could check out some of my works as well.

aww he's falling for her so sweet! but at this rate the only guy not falling for her will be kaijin! and whatever happend to her mp3 player? o, kudos for updating so quickly! cookies! :)

o. update and i will lovwe you forever! XD