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| Child of the New Moon 2008-05-20 ch 1,  | abuseI loved it, absolutely loved it. I especially loved how you gave colors to feelings - "The silver pain of all my efforts to hold back" - and I loved the conversation between her and her mother (I suppose you would call it a conversation...? xD) Anyway. Just loved it. |
| October Sun 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseOh...pretty. That was amazing. Very intense, very other-worldly. Fantastic descriptions. I love it! -Hadley |
| Written 2008-04-16 ch 1, | abusewow, gorgeous writing! it's kind of weird, but in a way that REALLY works. very intense piece, and I love the ending paragraph. it's just killer! |
| One Must Wonder 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abuseWow, amazing. It was great. |
| LittleChoLo 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseWell, it reminded me a bit of 'Fugitive Pieces' by Anne Michaels. The imagery was particularly evocative, especially "sight her hair fanned out like a desperate banner". Possibly my favourite line was: "A ribbon of spite, the fetid flash of many insect-feed on the back of my neck." It was beautifully poetic. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was intense. I don't know how you did it. It's so great to see pieces like this, especially of this length. I feel like you just got caught in this story and it wouldn't let you go until you finished it. It's gorgeous. Love it. Keep writing! :) |
| clumsybella15 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseWow. There are no other words. |
| Rose on the Wind 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseThat was beautiful. Simply beautiful. It was a joy to read. You did a very good jon, though I wonder how envy had a daughter. what ever the case, it was beautiful. -Rose |
| sincerely disregard 2007-08-20 ch 1, | abuseVery avant-garde. The imagery is sensational and the emotions are almost tangible. |