wow, for being fictional this is intensely detailed and so real-seeming. (but then, i'm a sucker descriptions of old houses with hardwood floors and pretty dust motes.)
still, it made me feel like i was there.
also, nice use of lyrics within the body of writing.

elytra... thats what its called
lol
i loved it
especiially how your work follows what ever trend or new invention youve found
the time lapse
and the lyrics are a perect combination
and i cant wait to read the one that you havent written yet... cannon and willow

pretty. i liked these phrases: "cigaretteflowersmogfruittree air" and "unclassified gem eyes." did the lyrics inspire this, or did the song happen to fit into what you wrote?

i wish that i had another word for beautiful or gorgeous or magnificent but my brain's not working and neither is the thesaurus, but i'm sure that you have a million because you are amazing like that

this is so wonderful.
i like how it is completely fictional and completely real.
love.