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| Therese Delacoeur 2007-10-17 ch 1,  | abuseHehehe... You'd have some controversy with the Yankees at my school... They're all Mets fans... Anyway. *slight cough* *bit shagrined at the side track* Just a few errors -- stuff like "town" should be "tone," "wait" should be "weight," you forgot a "do" in "to [do] miracles," and did you mean, "she complains about me being predictable" instead of "...UNpredictable"? It makes better sense without the prefix. Oh, and a few commas wouldn't be amiss. (Sorry. I'm comma-crazy. *grins helplessly*) However, this was a lovely light piece! I though that the stabs at the stereotypes were perfect and just plain funny. You might enjoy "Stupid Prophesies and the People Who Enforce Them" by Jack Argyle. (It's favorited on my account) It's full of stereotypes and takes great pleasure in absolutely pulverizing them all. Nice one! |