I really like it. The poem is especially good. I'd have to admit it's my favorite element. Really adds to it.

now this is much better. can we randomly delete the end of and the angels cried and put this here instead? it's adorable. :D

on a more serious note, though, it's good. I'd like to see more of this kind of interaction between angelo/kiran, which I guess will be what the 8-10th books will be about.

That's so sweet! I love gay guy stories!