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King of Kings 2008-10-08 ch 15,	abuseUh-oh. That's certainly not good. o.o Were those men the 'claws' that man warned Masaki of - and what do they want, anyway? Quite the cliff-hanger you left there...>.< I loved the part with Kalidos here. I've probably said this before - a couple times - but I think he's the most interesting character in this story. I like him a lot - although his presence makes me uneasy for everyone else around him. XP Not much else to say; I'm elated to see another chapter of this! As is the nature of your stuff, it's left me eager for more! Hail spontaneous writing urges! XD
wolfblood82 2008-10-07 ch 15,	abuseOh man wtf? No Sol?! :( And I'm actaully hoping to see him here especially when I assumed the person Kalidos mentioned was referring to him. :S Anyway, good bit of hint on Kalidos' nature and powers. I do hope that he won't end up like a one pattern evil guy. And yeah, the whole scene with Masaki is rather interesting. Wonder what's actually happening behind the scenes. And I really wonder if the mysterious people here are the Claws. And yeah, you're so evil put this kind of cliffie on me lol! :D Anyway, good chapter and glad to see that you've updated this one. And yeah, Elven Chronicles has been updated. Hope to see your review for it soon! ^^ Bye! :)
King of Kings 2008-09-01 ch 14,	abuseAh, so Thundering Magic is finished? Excellent! I do look forward to reading it when you have it published. Be sure to alert me. ;) Anyway, about this story...amazing chapter. One of the best in this. I admit, I was hoping Coreth wouldn't end up slaughtering those people, though. T.T I feel sorry for them, and him, too. Great descritions - I hope he's able to control himself better in the future. Guess I understand Akrin's stand on all this, too. I assume the shaking was connected somehow to what happened with Coreth? Things have certainly become more interesting. I love this story, and I hope you continue it. ;) If so, I look forward to another chapter!
King of Kings 2008-08-22 ch 12,	abuseHonestly, it's good to see some development on Akrin's part. I'm still not particularly fond of him, but perhaps he isn't so callous and heartless after all. It's never easy to be a king, now is it? You also did well with Masaki, his inner struggle with uncertainty. It'll be interesting to see what comes of all this, and what Masaki finds should he locate Coreth. Just to throw this out there in case you decide to edit this any time in the future: [...to follow the trail of destruction Coreth, Masaki’s (cousin), had left him.] Unless I'm reading this wrong, I think the 'cousin' should be 'brother', right? ;) Quite an emotional chapter...and I see I'm nearing the end of what you currently have posted. Uh-oh. XP
King of Kings 2008-08-19 ch 11,	abuseWow. 'That' was unexpected. o.o I had an inkling it might be him after all, though, but something else threw me off...guess I was right. Things just got a whole lot more interesting. Not much else to say for this chapter. Now I understand much better what Kalidos plans...I was wondering, is he the intended 'villain'? If so, the way you entwined him into this story is excellent. I love it as usual! XD
King of Kings 2008-08-08 ch 10,	abuseIs that some trace of paternal concern Akrin just displayed? Regardless, excellent way to begin this part. Your riddles do impress me sometimes. XD I have some inklings as to the answers, but I doubt I'm right... 'Was' Masaki dreaming? It certainly did not seem like it to me, not completely. The scene was wonderfully done, and the whole chapter was written quite well. Very intruiging...you always do leave a lot of questions, and I love that. ;)
King of Kings 2008-07-31 ch 9,	abuseGreat conclusion to the first part of this. It truly does seem Sol - Coreth - has some power within...but what was that shape? Heh, I have almost as many questions as Sol at the moment! XD Excellent chapter. The descriptions when Sol rescued the children were very well done, as always. It'll be interesting to see how it all unfolds from here, and I look forward to commencing with the second part! ;)
King of Kings 2008-07-20 ch 7,	abuseYet another awesome chapter - and I see I'm nearing the end of part one, huh? Anyway, the story-telling part was quite interesting, and you did the children's dialogue well. Heh. Kids. This Shadowed Day...I wonder - will it be a part of your plot for this story? The part also made me speculate on what the clan could know, and why they're so reticent - and when Sol will finally remember who he is. Well, nothing to complain about. I look forward to reading the next chapter, as usual! XD
King of Kings 2008-07-13 ch 6,	abuseAh, every time he comes up, Kalidos just seems more and more mysterious and intruiging. I honestly can't make heads or tails of him - at least, not at this point. o.o Heh. XD I like him, though...I think he's my favorite so far. I believe I've probably mentioned this before, but your portrayal of elves is always quite interesting. It's certainly unique. ;) Only one thing I saw here: [“I would prefer to speak of it only in the audience of the Empriyor,” he said. “There, you will here.”] - I think 'here' should be 'hear'. ;) Great chapter as always! XD
King of Kings 2008-07-07 ch 5,	abuseOh, poor Masaki. T.T I have to say, I dislike King Akrin more and more with every chapter. I have a strong suspicion he's going to interfere with Masaki's and Gelindar's plans in the future... Anyway, I have to say this was probably the best chapter so far. Well written as always, and the history on the elves - and the legend of their origin - was intruiging, and like Masaki it made me wonder about Coreth. I like him - he's a very interesting character. I hope the two boys find the lost elf...and I'll be interested to see what happens should the two make it into the Northern Kingdoms, and how they manage to in the first place. Nothing I saw here. Amazing chapter! XD
King of Kings 2008-06-24 ch 4,	abuseSome nice developments this chapter. The part with his mother's ghost, angel, whatever she was, was done well. ;) Poor Masaki, though. T.T I like him, and it'll be interesting to see what his conviction to rescue his brother leads to... So Coreth is Sol, right? Hm...I think I understand what happened in the first chapter now. The boy must have some incredible power to do something like that... Good to see Geldinar will help Masaki. I wonder if he'll play a bigger role in this? The only thing I saw grammatically - for when you ever decide to edit this again, of course - was twice you used 'distant' when I think you meant 'distance'. One was here: [Masaki turned right and ran down the hall, seeing nothing but his mother in the distant.] You see? ;) I can't remember where the other one was, however...eh. Heh. Anyway, even if it is old, another great chapter! XD
King of Kings 2008-06-17 ch 3,	abuseHey! Long time, no review. Remember me? ;) At any rate, another excellent chapter. You know, you're very good at making stories full of mystery. XD There are lingering questions...although, I do have my suspicions of the nameless man - or should I say, Sol. Actually, I had them from the beginning, but now they're even stronger...whether I'm right or not remains to be seen, though. ;) Kalidos and the elf who lost his memory seem similar. Are they somehow connected? And for that matter, what's the deal with Kalidos? Ball of Fire. It is fitting. ;) I like it... One thing I want to point out, though, as trivial as it is - 'crush his skill'. Should that be 'skull'? Just didn't seem right to me...;) This story is almost as good as Thundering Magic. XD I hope that story is going well! Review you later!
wolfblood82 2008-05-14 ch 14,	abuseLawl it's me again. XD Anyway, surprised that you've updated this so fast. Well, at least it's faster than i expected lol! XD Anyway, good chapter here. Overall, I like it. Or should I say, this is one of the better, if not the best, chapters in this story. ;) Well, yeah, I've finally thought of some CCs here lawl! :P Well, first things first, on the first part of Akrin and Masaki, I'll say it's a job well done. But tbh, I think you could have done a bit om Masaki. Like some random dream on the past or some weird vision that could further portray his character or even starting certain developments as well. Second thing is that for Coreth, I think you can make him see some kind of visions in certain ways or form to make the reader feel even stronger for his internal struggles. Apart from that, well, erm yeah, no more CCs lol! Anyway, thanks very much for your reviews for my stories so far. Hope to see more of them in the future when I update! ^^ Bye! :)
ohthevoices 2008-05-14 ch 14,	abuse"...reminiscence of what had just happened." = reminiscent Aha, I like how you're tying that whole thing with Kalidos in here. I was wondering when that was going to come into play. I hope you update again soon!
ohthevoices 2008-04-14 ch 13,	abuseSo, it looks like I was write about Sol really being Coreth. =D I liked it, but I didn't really get the poem at the end...was someone reciting it?

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