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JtheChosen1 2008-07-20 ch 20,	abuseexcellent story! can't wait for more!
Neilani 2008-07-20 ch 5, anon.	abuseMan, the story has just begun and it is completely awesome! If I thought I wrote this good then I would be totally happy. lol
Neilani 2008-07-18 ch 1, anon.	abuseWoW! Some one, and author here, suggested this story and I was a bit hesitant to read it at first, but I'm glad I did. I only read the prologue so far, and I really like it. lol It's cool. :D
naokoangel01 2008-07-16 ch 19,	abuseThis is a great story even awesome I loved it the drama and romance was perfect for this kind of story I cant wait to read the squeal! Good luck on the rest of your stories I sure they are great as this one :)
de6789 2008-07-14 ch 1,	abusegreat! except u missed some quotation marks near the end, kinda confusing.
Xxmoon-nightxX 2008-07-07 ch 8,	abuseOkay I will review now! I L-O-V-E it! =P love, love, love, and more love! giggle you story made me hyper, which happens when I read good ones!
XCgirl 2008-06-16 ch 7,	abuseBlaise was so nice in this chapter! So different from before! This chapter was really interesting, but i can see how it would be terrible to write.
black ennui 2008-06-09 ch 20,	abusei started your story last night, and couldnt get enough of it. after reading it all night, i cant help but have just a few words to tell you: it was great. thanks for the great read! :)
Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-05-15 ch 20,	abuseI really enjoyed it- it was fast paced, and slightly confusing, but i did think the story plot was cool :D
Niek 2008-05-11 ch 20,	abuseWell, I've finally finished it and i have to say that this is a wonderful story. I really and truly enjoyed reading it. The plot was well thought out and the characters were planned out well. I only have a few qualms with it. There seemed to be quite a few grammar errors like writing heal instead of heel, night instead of knight, and things like that. There were also numerous typos. Secondly, it seemed that Faye was resisting Blaise too much still when the story came to its end. Because the constant, "I hate you's" and angry outbursts got a bit monotonous because it was an every chapter thing. Also, after all they'd been through, one would think that Faye would be only a bit more accepting. I halfway expected Faye to accept the proposal by the end of the story. But other than that, I really enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work with your future projects. :) -Niek
Niek 2008-05-07 ch 4,	abuseWow, this story is very very good so far, story wise. Though I have found several grammar mistakes and spelling errors throughout it. BUt the story is wonderful and I really do like it. :D But I have to stop reading for now, but I'll pick it back up later. :D -Niek
anitsirK 2008-04-27 ch 19,	abuseI have to say that you have a good premise. :) So, I'll start with that. But I do have some complaints, though. Please take all of what I would have to say as constructive criticism and don't think I'm insulting you, because I'm not. First of all, truthfully speaking, you could have improved on the grammar. BUT, I know it may just be because of carelessness or some typos so I'll forgive you a little on that. But really, sometimes the only problem was the words weren't placed where they were supposed to be or that you used the wrong words for certain things. So, just be more careful on how you phrase or describe things. It was just distracting, reading grammatical errors. Secondly, the story was good. But it could have been better if you made some main characters more dynamic. For example, Allister, he was too static/flat for me. It seems like he was always just in the background. You never told us how he and Blaise met and how they became as close as they are now. But, I don't know if you saved their story up for the sequel. If you did, I think putting their story in the first installment is much better so as to make Allister's character clearer. Character development could still be better. Make them more dynamic. Also, I thought that Faye was kind of annoying sometimes. She was kind of like Blaise in a way. They both had serious mood swings. And it was a little too much, their constant bickering. You could lessen it and make their arguments a lot more reasonable. Also, some arguments were repeated. It becomes quite boring, if they can't even agree on something once and for all and they're always arguing about the same thing. It became repetitive and petty. Everything is ok, actually. :) And I did like the story. But there is still a lot of room for improvement.
Morte d'Amour 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abuseHello there! I came across this story last week, and since then I've been a silent lurker skimming over this story. However, I cannot remain in the shadows for such a wonderful story, so I will review each chapter because I would be rude not to. Reading this in detail, I have noticed that you have several minor grammatical errors and misspellings. That's no big deal, though, because a good editor can fix that up in no time. What is important is the content, which might I add is wonderful and lively. Your writing style is funny, cute, and very entertaining. I may be somewhat of a slow reviewer, but I assure you that I will have great fun in reading this story. :]
aneman333 2008-03-27 ch 19,	abuseI absolutely loved this story! It reminds me of Stephanie Meyer's Twilight series, but it is still a very good, creative and original plot. I can't wait for Apple!
sheby 2008-03-26 ch 20, anon.	abusethis was an AMAZING story, i hope that you write more like this. congradulations on finishing!

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