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| L3le'ArO 2008-01-11 ch 10,  | abuseI dont like clif hangers great story thoug i love joey an invisible hotty how cool tanya is ..weird wats wrong or right or w/e with joey i wanna know badd! |
| xoxstorii-gurrlxox 2007-10-31 ch 10, | abuseO.. this was good soo far.. haha.. well you got the funny part some what down. A little of it is confusing.. but I am getting it eventually. Well I hope you update soon.. and if you want to check out some of my stories. Peace xoxstorii-gurrlxox |
| desertrozea 2007-09-22 ch 7, | abuseI'm not quite sure where to begin. Personally, I think this story and the plot has a lot of potential. There is a lot of stuff you can do, though, that would really make it shine. It's just little stuff that I noticed as I was reading through it, though, and I can't quite remember it all now. If you would like me to, I'll go through it again and write you a detailed message about everything. Right now, however, I'm really tired. So tired, in fact, that I almost didn't leave a review, but you begged so sincerely that I just couldn't help myself. ;) Alright. Whether or not you want me to, I'm going to come back tomorrow and do what I can to help you out a bit. I would really like to see this story become amazing. I'll talk to you tomorrow. Keep going! |
| E. Joy Winter 2007-08-23 ch 1, | abuseI am very, very, excited to see what happens as this story goes on. I love stories like this. You used a good vocabulary [shunned - great word] and you've got me wanting to know what happens next. The only thing I didn't like was the last part. "Oh and my name is Casey." It's fine but it just didn't... flow? Well I'm not going to tell you that you MUST change it or anything but maybe explor different possibilities. =] |