Impressive. Very impressive. I rarely find love poetry that doesn't immediately strike me as moronically cliche, but this one doesn't even reach slightly cliche; it's written with very original language. Even more impressive is that it's a sonnet [an almost Shakespearean one at that, it's only missing the stanza breaks], which automatically makes it more difficult as it gives you rhyming and stylistic restraints. I LOVE the rhymes; I'm always impressed with rhyming in sonnets, because they're always unexpected. The words are ones that you don't, at first, think to rhyme.

Finally, I'm a romantic, so I loved it. Could relate to it, also. Well done.

Someone out there is very lucky to have you.

Beautiful. You have a certain way with words that can provoke an image in the reader's head. Neither subtle or blatant - this truly is poetry in one of it's many, many moments. Thank you for the enjoyable read. - a.d.

very sad...like what they say, love is a cold and broken hallelujah...beautifully written.

summerdazed

I love the lines "I can hear now my heart’s desperate screams/As it races to be by your side."

Great job on this :)