 Cherrie-san 2009-06-29 . chapter 21Wow...
That was brilliant! The plot, the characters. It was all so intricate and amazing! I loved it! Have you continued this story?
Didn't see many errors, just one or two scattered about. Though I will admit, I did get confused at first. I thought I missed the first part of the story, but once I read past that it sucked me in. Great story! |
 Benzene 2009-05-04 . chapter 21 WOW!! Amazing plot and character development. I'm surprised that there aren't more reviews for this story. It's definitely book worthy. Don't remember seeing any grammatical errors. I also like the expected twists and the maturity in this tale. Sometimes authors on Fictionpress are just too young. This definitely is not cliche or immature. Good work. |
 TemptedByLaNuit 2009-04-30 . chapter 21Wow.
FANTASTIC.
*re-reads last chapter in awe*
*adds story/you to favorites list* |
 daydee 2009-02-20 . chapter 21I love this story. you should definitely publish. you have no idea how much i cried when court died, and it's hard to make me cry. you should be proud of yourself. i wouldn't change anything about it. |
 il capitano 2008-10-14 . chapter 21that was a good story
the plot was interesting but i think there were a lot of loose ends- like wat happens with ryan-didnt he love her? so mayb u should embellish onto wat happens with him
also i think that mayb u should make her wanting out of everything more gradual and yes you do drop hints but u should make her consider dropping out of everything,including the sanctucci stuff, more seriously and embellish on it
and the flashbacks mayb u should spread them more evenly out coz usually theres a whole chunk of them together
otherwise its an uber-awsome story, its really cool and when u hav the time to edit it u should coz wen its polished i bet it'll turn out really really good. lookin forward to the sequel |
 Doomy 2008-03-24 . chapter 7I'm a little confused at to why Keetan burned down the building. |
 Doomy 2008-03-24 . chapter 6I like Keetan quite a bit less at this point... >:( |
 Doomy 2008-03-24 . chapter 5I actually kind of like Cari. She's spiffy-ish. Not spiffy yet, but getting close.
And I REALLY like Keeton. He's fricking awesome! Totally spiffy. |
 Doomy 2008-03-24 . chapter 4GRRAAHH!! Still confuzzled. Ah well...
What is Shane to the Chinese mob exactly? That's my question... |
 Doomy 2008-03-24 . chapter 2Hmm, a pinch confuzzled. How old is Shane? |
 Doomy 2008-03-24 . chapter 1O... spiffy!! I can't wait to check it... ^__^ |
 Nat 2008-03-07 . chapter 21 Just wondering... Did you write anything for the next book? I know this is your oldest story, and you've progressed past it, but I loved this series and it still hasn't ended. |
 Kristina Malfoy 2007-10-01 . chapter 21Wow. Court is dead... and Kimberly is a **. I really started to like her in #3. Now? Not so much. Please tell me you are working on the next (and last?) one! I cannot believe you would just leave their stories hanging like that. And why do you want to take the series down? It's a wonderful series for people to stumble upon and read. Please keep up the good work. |
 yoshawn 2007-08-24 . chapter 21Shocking, but it somehow it fit. You are truly an amazing talent. You make all your characters believable and I can't help but love Shane. The whole series has been one that I can't stop until I finish it. Never stop writing and I won't stop reading. |