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| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-05 ch 7,  | abuseLOL i really like their conversations so amusing! ^^ |
| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-05 ch 6, | abuseand my questions are finally answered! i honestly thought Abdul had a crush on her or something, nice twist on them being her... er... sort of guardians. =P and then there's Holden... and Ace (I really really like him LOL) |
| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-05 ch 5, | abusethat Myles... tsktsk i liked the way you made the characters, especially Ace i really can't see him as someone evil... or anything near it =P next chapter... next chapter... ^^ |
| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-05 ch 4, | abusei really like Ace! that's all i could say LOL love reading your story i really like your writing style and the conversations flow beautifully but it's getting too late so i'll just continue tomorrow... ^^ |
| Nnaliseaai 2008-07-05 ch 1, | abuseI like it but there's one thing. When I read it it felt like you were telling me everything about the characters and the situation instead of letting the reader find out what everything on our own. For example the characters' personalities. You told us what they were all like the first moment they were introduced. Myself, as a reader, I like to find out about everything as the story goes on not as soon as the story starts. I hope that didn't seem too harsh. Bye, Nnaliseaai |
| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-05 ch 3, | abusehm... something's up with Abdul.. and Kaya... anyway, on with the next chapter! i could only hope that my questions are answered there heehee |
| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-05 ch 2, | abusewow, i'm surprised her parents even got together! i mean, it's really hard to get along with people you are totally opposite with... anyway, nice chapter! at least she managed to break up with her vampire of a boyfriend (i have my own imagination of Myles... LOL) |
| Literate Barbarian 2008-07-04 ch 1, | abuseToo tired to read much further right now, but I do have one comment on your opening at least. I like the tone of the opening entry of the protagonist, but having both her writing entries and the main narrative in first person is kind of jarring. It makes me wonder who she is addressing as a narrator since the "homework" has an implied audience. |
| i owe you a cup of c0ffee 2008-07-04 ch 1, | abuseyou're not bad at writing you know. i only needed to read this one chapter to tell you that i really really want to read chapter 2 (really really do...) but i have an exam tomorrow so i think i better study first... *sighs* but i WILL finish this ^^ |
| rosieroo 2008-07-03 ch 12, | abusegood update!! ...but wat happened to ace?? i thought she really liked him! |
| Kalera Ivy 2008-07-03 ch 1, | abuse*smiles* So far, an interesting beginning. On one hand, Celeste seems like an typical teenager, and then on the other, her powers as a Protector lend her much more of an interesting air. Other characters, such as Dezi, seem to have hidden stories with them, also. *Wanders off to continue the story* Keep writing! |
| Ayla Raspus 2008-07-02 ch 12, | abuseHey...thank you for your awesome review. I really appreciate it. I'm really enjoying this story! Keep it up! |
| toboe059 2008-07-02 ch 12, | abusesry for update'n so late!! ne wayz,i liked this chap, it was interest'n. i can't wait till the next chap, to figure out more on what's about to happen! so, until then!!~, UPDATE SOON!!~ ^_^ |
| Tears of Deathwishxxx 2008-07-01 ch 12, | abuseNo problem. I'm glad to be a loyal reader. Keep up the work. |
| Crimsom Tears 2008-06-30 ch 12, | abuseWow! You're an awesome writer You get hooked on this story The names are pretty creative too... :D Continue writing! The story is great -Crimsom Tears |