i love this.

it feels as if he's having a palpable confict. i feel like i'm reading an old drama or something.

i also feel like i'm readng my life, but in guy form.
crim and punishemt is killing me.

but i loved it, funny, smart, descriptive.

my only issues were the name Kaori? i feel like a more basic name would distract less from the basic plot, also “Bo, Gina! Get the frick off!” i think the f word can be used. by not using it, it sort of interupted the flow of the story for me. teenage boys curse, its just a fact of life.

but over all, good job.