i love this.

I love the honesty in this piece - sometimes as good as the imagery is, when people exaggerate emotions it gets quite sickly. I actually found the awkward line breaks good, considering I sometimes have them as well.. heh. Although I have to say the use of the dash gets killed after a while, using it occasionally and to great effect is better than using it as much as you feel like it in my opinion. At times it feels a bit weak ("to vandalise my already feeble soul") - vandalise is good, already feeble, not so good. But hey, that's just my opinion... keep doing your thing :)

lovely poem. i can relate to this alot. good job and keep up the good work.

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EXTREMELY well-written.