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| SirScott 2007-09-28 ch 1,  | abuseI liked the line: Your floating above the Milky Way in a hot air balloon Yeah, I would like to float to a Milky Way in a hot ballon. Those poor little girls who have to tickle themselves. Good job. ~SirScott |
| Core Satiated 2007-09-17 ch 1, | abuseThis one is my favorite. There is a heartbreaking moment (the little girl) that wrenches. Whether it's from experience or creativity, you tapped into it. I can feel the bitterness. "Repressing happy memories" is just so full of resent. I can truly relate, which is why it touched me so much. I wish my poetry was this deep. |
| crazilazigurl 2007-08-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseto lazy to sign in..LOL!! but another amazing poem..ur language personifies each emotion to the point where they seem to jump off the screen, and make u feel exactly what you're feeling!! why all the heartache though? |
| painting andromeda 2007-08-27 ch 1, | abuse"Your floating above the Milky Way in a hot air balloon and then we all burst into flames Reading eyes that show the world what acting hides Screaming the story no one really wants to here Reminds me of little girls sitting at home tickling themselves because no one loves them enough to make them laugh Hug that teddy bear a little closer" Your diction is amazing, it made this poem breathe. Amazing job. |
| A little birdie once told m... 2007-08-26 ch 1, | abuseAside from the "here" typo, this is most definitely one of your best. I'm not sure if you're referring back to the moment, or whether you're still not quite over it. Like I said, I knew you would make something beautiful out of it. Adding to Favorites, no doubt. Breathtaking as usual. |