I really liked this.

i liked this for the same reason i liked the other one, but while this one was good, it wasnt as powerful as the other.

It seemed at some parts like it was supposed to have a rhyme pattern, but then at most of the parts it didn't seem that way. Albeit, I haven't slept in about four days so I'm probably just going crazy. Well written and I like the message it sends across. Keep up the good work.

I like it, especially the repetition.