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Reviews For: Moonlight and Redwoods

SirScott
2007-09-28
ch 1,
abuseI liked the line the yin and yang are one in the same.

~SirScott
painting andromeda
2007-08-28
ch 1,
abuse'Silent bliss flying and falling on top of me
like snowflakes performing my favorite ballet
It's nice to hear my heart beat again
It's nice to hear my heart sing again

The moon smiles at me from rise till her fall
Reassuring my eyes with sand that sleep is visiting tonight
My pillow is still soaked with thoughts of you, it'll dry soon
But I must say good night for I haven't been dreaming in years

It's nice to have you behind my eyelids at night again
It's nice to have you in my heart and life again'

Brilliant. Simply amazing. I'm in love with the concept of this poem, of gaining back a seemingly lost love. I just wish we all could be so lucky. Great work!
from beneath the bell jar
2007-08-27
ch 1,
abuseGod this is really beautiful. Best poem I've read in a long time. Man, where do I start? The wording was so clever and poetic. I usually pick a line I like but there were so many...oh well, I'll pick some anyway:

"Where the emeralds are far from green
And words are never misunderstood"

"Silent bliss flying and falling on top of me
like snowflakes performing my favorite ballet" - my absolute favorite.

"My pillow is still soaked with thoughts of you, it'll dry soon"

Anyway, awesome awesome piece. Adding to my c2.

Maybe you could check out my new piece, "Endless"?
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