Reviews for Heart of a Dragon

Alleara Ralana
2008-05-05
ch 7,

abuseI like your description, its very detailed. I think you could clarify some stuff a little more, but other than that, it was well written!

-Alleara

Ramona122003
2008-05-04
ch 1,

abuseInteresting beginning. I have a few nitpicks, however. Please, cut down on your paragraphs blocks. They make your story hard to read.

Also, you have several quotes in one paragraphs. It would be best to put each quote in a separate paragraph unless it is the same person talking.

You may also consider given some personality to your descriptions. Although you have one of you character explaining the setting, the voice very neutral. This would be best time for you to show the readers you character's traits.

It is very good so far and I am Interested to see what direction you will take this story:)

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