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| smile for the sunshine 2008-01-31 ch 1,  | abusethat's pretty and sweet and yet shows inner struggles. don't we all feel somewhat reserved at first but then sometimes, i think we drop our guard too soon and it just becomes a mess in the end because you finally stopped stressing and let yourself believe that maybe forever was possible. but usually that's unlikely. best wishes for you. = ) |
| Kneeling Glory 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseYour last stanza could use a little work. It's got a great message, but you're TELLING it to us. In the rest of the poem, you're SHOWING us. And seeing, my dear, is believing. Still, an excellent write. I'm enjoying reading your poetry. I experimented a little with formatting like you use, but it never worked for me like it works for you. :P |
| kelsi bones 2007-10-04 ch 1, | abusethis is amazing! i'm sure you know how i love the use of spaces, italics, bolded font and other such things in poetry by now =]. brilltiant work, especially the third line (that makes me feel like this could be happily ever after) very bueatiful imagery. maybe it's just me, but it makes me think of two people running off into the sunset together, but in a non-cheesy way, haha. k.X |
| in a jar pk 2007-09-26 ch 1, | abusegood gracious. i love this. =] |
| Pesadilla Mortal 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abuseThis was uber good :] I love the way the words played out to give this even more of a sense of reality. Keep up the good work! ♥P.M. |
| she smolders 2007-09-13 ch 1, | abuseLoving the imagery in the first verse and the deliberate break in the word "farther". Take care. |
| painting andromeda 2007-08-29 ch 1, | abuseThe formatting and words were perfectly picked, nice job. |