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| StarStudent 2008-05-18 ch 1,  | abuseI really like this, I think it's beautifully written, and it says everything. |
| Edgar Wellington 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseMaybe the moral of this poem is that sometimes all the efforts of making so much fruit is wasted. Eve was right: one really should eat the fruit. |
| kelsi bones 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuse"I've spent too long/forgetting me,/denying what I longed to be" I love these lines. I can really relate to them, as well as the entire poem. You're a very good writer =] k.X |
| Lily Harrison Thomas 2007-10-19 ch 1, | abuseI like this one because it's concise but manages to get the idea across perfectly well. If you read any of my other poems, you'll notice that I tend to take a few pages to get down to what I want to say. I don't think that's a bad thing necesarily, but I like your style a lot too. I also like the image of the pear tree that creeps in the end. Pears have interesting connotations, sweet but unpretentious, simple. And the fact that it's burned... well, I'm not sure what it means but I like the way it feels. |
| XxSacrificialXDemisexX 2007-09-15 ch 1, | abuseYou've made life out of nothing. The black debris and the crushed embers represent the little that's left in you because of it. You're hurting. Not sure if that's the correct interpretation, but good job nonetheless. |
| Night Silver's whisper 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseYour work is breathtaking, and I hope you don't take those words as empty flattery. I don't give open flattery. This piece of art is beautifully written, perfectly begun, and gorgeously concluded. There is no editing advice to give on this. Night Silver's Whisper |
| Liebe Dance 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseI like this poem a lot. It's beautifully written free verse. The rhyming is good, not distracting or awkward. The pear tree part was a little confusing. I don't know, but I just didn't really get what that part was about. Maybe I'm just not good enough at understanding poetry. |
| Ramenluver 2007-08-29 ch 1, | abuseHm...not my favorite, but the imagery was very distinct. I kinda didn't get it when you said 'pressing foam to muffle sound',but it's poetry, so I guess it's supposed to be a bit abstract. :) -Ramen |
| Faithless Juliet 2007-08-28 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful detail, I really enjoyed this, keep it up. Much love, Juliet. |