xrho
2007-08-28
ch 1,  | abuseThese are wonderful! I liked the first one, especially. I wouldn't say they're "completely random". There is definitely a strong sense of the passage of time through all of them. I /would/ say that I think you should release these separately, or perhaps as different "chapters", because they all stand by themselves beautifully, and they'd be easier to read and consider individually if they were on a page by themselves. I think they deserve that attention. (Which is posh, really, so feel free to ignore it. They're beautiful as they are, as well.) |
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