Not sure I understand your poem, lovie. It seems like it has deeper meaning to it and I'm just not able to understand it. Symbolism is no longer my forte.

the image of self-irony in this is like a slap in the face. and makes me think too of how sometimes the girl we see next to us really is us..

mezzie

Oh man, I love that. Awesome. So small, so simple. Very cool stuff. Flows well, I love how quick each line is till we come to that line of regret at the end. Gives a feeling that you're stuck on how frustrating the work is, and how easy it is to get distracted. Might be unintentional, but simple length of lines can gimme that feel.