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CrimsonxShadows 2008-07-08 ch 2,	abuseI love this story! You develop the characters with the right amount of background and description without actually giving the whole plot away in one sitting! It makes me crave more-like some kind of addict. I think I'll continue reading now, because this story is pretty sweet.
SirScott 2008-05-08 ch 12,	abuseGood chapter, it had been awhile since I have seen the word minx. Hope things are going well for you. ~SirScott
Hoodwynk 2008-04-08 ch 15,	abuseAlright, it was an epilogue; nothing too snazy, but very practical. I liked how they put him in jail instead of killing him since he was probably crazy. Cute story, but it lacks a clear cut moral. How did Roxy grow as a person? How did Ben grow? What did she learn from her experiences. Things to think about...
Hoodwynk 2008-04-08 ch 14,	abuseYou're not losing readers- merely recieving more sparodic reviews; um, this was a sort of filler chapter; it didn't really give any insight into their relationship save that they haven't consumated yet and like to see who is the most worried; and nothing else happened; even little 'filler' drama would have worked. This was very dry and, perhaps, rushed. However, if it served some purpose that I'm not fully creditiing... that is to say, maybe I'm missing something.
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 15,	abuseUmm... probably the best last sentence of a story EVER! I'm glad that Ben did well in the family reunion, I figured that everyone would like him. He's such a great guy. I also think it was a dead-on ending with Roxy being the one to save Ben. She's such a strong character! Very cool!! Sorry I missed reviewing when you were actually writing the story... things have been crazy... But I loved it! :)
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 14,	abuse“You’re the most unusual creature I have ever come across.” -- So true!! :) I think its cute when he tries to learn Spanish. Are they going to go to a family reunion!? I think it would be hilarious!
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 13,	abuseO it would be so much easier if he wasn't a DA, but then he wouldn't be happy, huh? Oh well!!I guess being a DA's wife will never be boring! :)
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 12,	abuseNo! I was hoping that at least one person in Ben's family would be nice...But look at who his family is. Gr. Oh well. at least she didn't get kidnapped! :) I like that "ha ha"-joke thing. Very cute. I'm running down to the last few chapters!! :)
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 11,	abuseAH! I guess in a way I'm glad that they got off with mental inst. but at the same time I want everyone to know what horrible people they are. But Catherine doesn't sound that bad? Is it going to stay that way? I hope so!! I like how Ben and Roxy are sorta "settling" in. They are so cute together!
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 10,	abuseAh! They really do have great chemistry! This chapter was awesome!! I'm getting a little sad, knowing that there are only five left...
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 9,	abuse"I could die happily just cuddling her" -- please... I wish you could make Ben real. Please? I love the whole language thing. It always fun when you have that second language that a boy doesn't understand, like Fools Rush In. And its so romantic! (Spanish, that is.) I can't wait to read the rest!
Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 8,	abuseAh! I like how he said that she would be upset about the wedding dress.. I know plenty of girls who that would be the first thing asked, "How's my wedding dress?" haha. Love the chapter, even though I hate what it is about. Sorry I hadn't reviewed in a while! :(
people.are.strange. 2008-03-31 ch 15,	abuseHah, 'twas a cute lil' ending for a cute lil' story. I liked it. Although I am not fond of happy endings the overall story made up for it. Thank you for being a good writer and letting me enjoy this story for as long as I did.
kingrankar76 2008-03-31 ch 15,	abuseNice baseball bat. I'm kinda sad that this is the end.
people.are.strange. 2008-03-30 ch 14,	abuseSorry that I haven't reviewed in the longest. I still do like the story, just haven't kept up with it. Seems everything is going good for them now, but I feel a big twist coming up.. maybe having to do with the phone call or even her headaches.

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