Oh no! Last chapter for now! My gosh, I've just noticed how incredibly unhelpful my last few reviews were..o_O
I really liked the way the characters have been acting, in the sense that they seem very human (not the way some being such jerks) There were some really interesting developments, and the subtle hints you gave out were great. I really want to see where all these new decisions will take Hope and friends, please update soon! :) Fab work

This is a great *though in my opinion, far too short* chapter. xD I can understand the reasoning behind Hope and Gideon's 'relationship,' for lack of a better word, though I'm rather worried that dating eachother will ruin chances with their respective crushes. But then again, maybe they'll make said crushes jealous and consequently pushing them into asking eachother out. Or something. Must continue reading :D

Oh no! Gideon and Hope? Well, I kind of expected it at the start of Holding onto Hope, but those ideas soon disappeared with the whole Matt/Madeliene things - speaking of which, where has that girl gone? I feel like I'm watching a drama xD

Oh my o.O
That's all I have to say.

Interesting, very interesting *attemps to look sauve and intelligent, but then falls off chair* I think I like Hope because I'm so similar to her ..in the clumsiness sense anyway xD.. The dialogue between hope and the guys seemed a little stiff, though I did like how she commented after they each introduced themselves, that was great. I like how Hope is becoming less goody-two-shoes as she grows up, it helps to symbolise her maturity. Very intriguing so far :)

Indeed, this did have a strong air of mystery - from what's been happening it looks almost like the story has some haunting in it! *but there can't be, it's a romance xD*
"It was incredibly illegal" Hrmm, learn something new everyday - In Aus it's okay as long as they're both over 16, unless there's like an extreme age diff and one is still under 18 or something like that, can't remember atm :)
I thought the '--finding hope--' was a good idea, it helped to show when there was a new section, though repeating the title was a bit irritating to me *I'm weird, I know* maybe just a '--'?
Just a little pet peeve
Some truly funny lines in there :P

I've finally figured out why I like these two stories so much! They're like reality, but better. Everything is based on and set around real life and real things, but what happens is like life enhanced..if that makes sense..xD
I love your writing style, it's so quirky and original. The characters are so indentifiable with that I disregard the grammatical mistakes most of the time now [which is a huge achievement for you, btw, since I'm REALLY picky when it comes to grammar and punctuation, etc..]
Great work :)

A really interesting beginning! The first line really drew me in, and I think you've kept Hope's personality wonderfully :D Hrmm, interesting last line *must read more!*

this is a good chapter, let alone a great story. you should update real soon.

chapters 1-3: I loved it. However, I believe this still feels like the beginning just dragging on for multiple chapters. Still, It's a great story with potential. I'm looking forward to where it's going. If I know Twilight Starr, it's gonna be good!

ahh
cuute
matt seems.. confused ;D
interesting how things are going
hope u update soon!
cant wait till something between Matt and Hope happens!

Excellent chapter, of course. We get into Hope's head a little bit as she has a conflict between her interests in Matt and Gideon. I assume that you didn't discuss her encounter with her family in detail because that would be distracting from the conflict at hand. Perhaps in a later chapter, you could delve into the details, considering that Hope's family is a central part of her life.

There are two things that I failed to strengthen when I betaed this story. They are not too big of a deal, but I am a very precise reader when I read others' stories (except for those that I am reading in my Human Experience in Literature and Language class; there are just too many of them to be overly critical about, especially since every writer that I read is an established one). Alas, here are my ideas about making this chapter a bit better:

1.) " “Will you stop that?” I [asked as I] fidgeted. " - I do not believe that she actually fidgets "Will you stop that?" because I doubt that Matt has a telepathic ability to read her body language, especially because he asks, "Stop what?" afterward. Instead, I believe that she asked that. When I read it before, I believed that people would be able to understand that she asked as she fidgeted, but when I looked back, I realized that it would be more accurate to say that she asked it. It isn't that huge of a deal; it is just I am really big into detail and want the readers to see the whole picture.

2.) “Exactly.”

“He had this job interview. He wouldn’t tell me what for. He doesn’t want to talk about it and he’s acting strangely.”

Is Hope saying both of these statements in the conversation between her and Landon? I should have been editing in the perspective of other readers who do not follow stories as easily as I do, instead of just my own. When I read these two statements back to back, I assumed that you had put in a pause between these two statements because they are both in a separate set of quotations. Generally, you have statements set in a separate set of quotations if you are making a transition from one speaker to the other. I did not see that transition here because it would be strange if Landon said the second statement. Here's my suggestion: if you add in a deep breath or a moment of silence between these two statements, it would make the story flow much better and be less confusing for other readers.

I apologize for not catching the second thing sooner, but until I read it with a more critical and awake eye, it wasn't as confusing. I figured that I would speak up now before someone else does, if he or she would. Nonetheless, it was a really interesting chapter that makes me want to read more.

Once again, great job, Starr. No grammatical errors or anything. I always enjoy this chapter. It's adorable how Matt, the seemingly normal guy, ended up admitting that he was also a prevert. I wonder what is up with Gideon's job interview, though.

Lol, at least, Matt is honest about what he wants from a woman. I'm glad that Hope and her dad made up.

~SirScott

AHH
matt seems very cuute ;)
cant wait to see what happens with him!
aww everything seems happy with the family
update SOON!
keep the fab work up ^.^