Poor Becky-- I feel so bad for her. The beginning is really funny.

Wow, everyone seems to know about Juto. I think maybe I was wrong, and he's just seriously in denial or repressed or something, and maybe kind of stuck up. Wow, that sounds bad, but I don't mean it that way. It makes him interesting, and that's good. And isn't it the different ways that we're all bad people that really make us interesting?

Mitch is certainly an odd one.

What a coincidence that he knows Sam-- but if he knows Sam, and he knows the two of them are looking for each other, why does he kick Juto out? I personally hope Juto realizes he deserves better, and learns a few basic emotions. Right now he's so interesting-- because he seems more like a mirror for everyone else than actually feeling anything on his own.

I do not like Sam.

And I don't know why you don't have more reviews, this is very well-written.

Make sure to start new paragraphs with new dialogue!

The ending of this chapter is great, the way the trucker describes his relationship with Socky is perfect (it sounds natural and says so much without too many words), and I love his 60s-hippie-Beatles thing going on. Especially the way Juto doesn't comment on it at all, but just accepts it and tries not to scoff. It's almost like the detachment-thing, but more just... it seems more apathetic.

I have never in my life heard the word vicissitude. But that might speak less to how crazy impressive it is and more to my small-ish vocabulary.

The transition between the first two paragraphs is a little awkward.

The dialogue between Alex and Becky is really funny-- Becky is just really funny. The part about her picking up and putting down the phone again and again is great.

Oh, no! Poor Toh. I like the way he thinks, and that he drinks... and his cat.

I do not like Juto now, but maybe he's just an emotional blackhole and he'll get better. I have faith that he will...

I'll admit, I was confused about the past/present thing, but once I reread it, it was a zillion times better. Well, duh, of course something's better when you get it.

Anyway, you have this really great, detached style of writing that works really well with Juto, because he seems like a pretty disaffected kid.

yay! the gay boy updated!

well, u deny being gay, but we all know...

ok that was mean and cold. on to a brighter, happier, pinker topic:

nice update. sorta lost me at the end, but it's all good. btw ur a/n was so fucking confusing. ugh. and that macadamia nut comment on the end, one word: wha?

still, i guess u should update soon, i mean, i am bored. but first. ADMIT UR GAY!

don't be afraid.

i wont tell.

xD

or will i...?

the world may never know...

ahh ha ha ha! i did that just to write that line

maybe...

i should stop rambling now.

but i cant xP

o-o-oa-oa

NO

reading old coments made me bring back carmelldancen

-tries to think of new song-

GOTZ IT!

i want it that way...

i iz lonely.

just update, god damn it! xD

-shuts up-

bye

-oops-

what happened to you man? you havent updated like any of your stories in forever!

anyways, great update. UPDATE SOON.

raely

o-o-oa-oa
caramelldancen - now there is a great song O.o w/e

hey, i must be like your only source of reviews


anyways, im still wasting my life away listening to caramelldancen and reading your crap, but thats ok since im about to write soon.

great song *cough* i mean update

write on.

o-o-oa-oa

oh sorry, still listening to caramelldancen, good song!

oh, great chapter btw, write on.

i think this is good

of coarse im listening to caramelldancin, so maybe im reviewing that instead

who knows, write on!

ha, good start.

its kinda ood, almost all of your stories have gay characters in them...

Here's my donation.

Mitch seems a bit Psychotic.

I've never heard Spoon, but I have heard OF them. Now I'll have to go listen to them, if only so I get the chapter title. Also, I'm always open to potential awesome music. (Then again, I'm not quite sure I trust Mitch's taste.)

Looking forward to future chapters!

Yeah, that's the problem with FictionPress, it's almost as if no one's around...

Huey the Hippie. Has a ring to it. Your characters feel very real, even when they're just introduced.

Vicissitude.

I like the sound of that.

This chapter made me laugh, especially this part:

'She heard a little choking noise at the other end. "I-I told him to...g-go to I-I-Indonesia!" Alex sobbed theatrically'

Which I sort of feel guilty about because Toh is so distraught. But still, Indonesia! Also, I really like Becky, that's one awesome character you have there :)