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| emily shambles 2007-12-01 ch 1,  | abusebeautiful imagery. this is understanding, sensitive. |
| DiaRose 2007-09-25 ch 1, | abuseWow! Your words are so significant and impressive. Love, ~Dia |
| Blissfully Sarcastic 2007-09-25 ch 1, | abuseHumph--interesting. Short, yet it still gives you something to think about. I liked it. ^^ |
| Eagle Seance 2007-09-15 ch 1, | abuseAgh. I don't like the blood/suicide theme too much, but this poem was very vivid, so I liked it. |
| Night Silver's whisper 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseGood gods. I am impressed. Such a small piece, just an incredible impact on the reader. Better yet! You got things to ryme. I wish I had this kind of talent at poetry. This is gorgeously raw and emotion ridden. Night Silver's Whisper |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-09-03 ch 1, | abuseThis poem intrigues me. For such a short length, it's quite complex, as if you're putting little meaning in each line/word. 'If I cut out my twisting neck/would I come pouring oit', that line is definitely a macabre imagery. Dead on. The flow of it is great and I'm going to add this in my faves. Keep writing! Great job! -C.N |
| Ramenluver 2007-08-31 ch 1, | abuseThe ending line ties it all together nicely. This was short, but very well expressed. An interesting take on suicide. -Ramen |
| Salister 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseThis poem contains a rhythmic balance, coupled with precise wording, that would make many poets green with envy. I thoroughly enjoyed reading each line, with great anticipation of the next. As before, great job! |
| a silenced revolution 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseDark and intriguing. I like the rhymes and the flow. Good job. |
| Jeanie Gordon 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseThis style of rhythm is my favorite. I'm so glad to read a poem done this way. :D This is definitely the best poem I've read on FictionPress so far. I think I'll 'favorite' it. I hope you keep writing this brilliantly well. :) P.S. I love the last two lines. |
| Ultimate Ryuu 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseWow...this is just wow. I really like how it's short & simple, but how emotional & expressional it can be anyway. Very very good. :] |
| AllAboutTheArts 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good! I love the "would I come pouring out?" bit. My only suggestion is the line right before that: If I cut out my twisting neck". Because You say "I" in the next line as well, the flow isn't as percise. We already know you're considering suicide, you don't need state it so obviously. It is poetry, after all! But still, great work. |