Well, this match was a little hard to follow, but that aside it just rocked! I loved it how Jaz got to help in the end. And it seems Nataku is on his own! Cool, possibly someone other then the protagonist will beat the main bad guy. Update soon!

This battle was cool and I like the fact that all the antagonists have unique skills. Certainly I'd like them is they were so evil. Winship seems the coolest now, but I still hope Nataku will kick his butt. And what about Milia?

Great use of descriptive adjectives. I like the first paragraph. It really caught my attention right from the start. I could tell that you put in a lot of thought into the fight scenes; As a reader, I could almost see everything that you were describing.
You were also very conscious of spelling and punctuation.

There were a few typos here and there, but I guess that is to be expected when you have lengthy chapters like this.

Other than that, I can't really think of anything that needs work on this particular chapter.

I'll definitely have to continue reading this one. Keep up the good work!

Well, Barrick vs. Saram was a bit confusing, but I really liked the finale of that battle. And it seems Barrick won't be helping Nataku... damn, how can he beat Winship then? You need to update soon, damnit! XD
Great job!

Barrick's battle was nicely done and I see Winship has some kick-** skill as well. Man, these bad guys are really something! I must admit I can't see how Nataku is supposed to defeat Winship, but perhaps Barrick will help him. But there's still Saram. Who's gonna beat him?
Man, this is getting better and better!

Wow, Nataku's fight rocked and both Caldo and that other guy seem to have cool abilities as well. The fights in this arc should prove very entertaining.
Great chappie, off to read more!

Great chapter, I loved it! I can't wait for the next one.

Nice chappie, granted at parts I found Barrck's fight a tad confusing as to what was going on. That aside I like the message behind it and it surprises me he got this much injury. Seems Nataku really is the one to defeat Winship. But can he do it, coz it seems the alchemist is immune to his attacks.
Update very soon!

Barrick's battle was quite entertaining. I especially liked it when he planned ahead. And could it really be that it'll be Nataku to defeat Winshiop? But isn't he the strengest of the bunch? That'd surely be a twist.
Can't wait to read more!

Well, Jaz lost rather easily, but seems to me he'll be making his big comeback soon! Nataku's fight was awesome, I like his fighting style. And now it also seems Winship is gonna be set free. This can't be good.
Off to read more!

Finally I got enough time to read the next arc. So a battle in the train, huh? Should be fun, but with so many enemies someone better help Barrick. This Nataku guy seems like the one, but I was also thinking about Jaz. Both seem like good material for heroes.
Either way I can't wait to see how this develops.
Excellent work!

Hm I really liked it, you write fight scenes very well, though I would tone down the use "thus", it got a little redundant after awhile, but other than that everything is good so far, I'll be back to read more

Winship's ability seems really cool... I wonder what can Nataku do against that sort of opponent? Or maybe Barrick will come to his rescue? But there's still that Saram guy... man, you sure know how to entertain the reader! Update soon!

Nataku rocks! I just love his style of fighting, it's really spectacular and I do hope we'll be seeing more of him! On another note: things seem to be heating up. I wonder if the soldiers will prove strong enough to handle this guy... and what about Barrick?

Ah, new arc and it's a battle on a train. Seems simple enough, but it'd appear the soldiers will be playing part in it all too... I wonder how you're gonna resolve all the fighting, since I somehow doubt Milia will be taking part in it.
Interesting start. Off to read more.