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| Reda 2007-12-26 ch 1,  | abuseNice job on the beginning. No action, and yet still gripping. You certainly have a way with words. I like Everan and Kamile's twin relationship. And I do love Kamile and adore Everan. Marli sounds like a cool teacher, and I want Kayle's job. :) You scare me, though, with your statement of how "attachment is never a good idea." Meep. What's going to happen? -Cheers- ~Reda~ |
| For What Its Worth 2007-09-08 ch 14, | abuseYes, Kirby-chan is a person that loves suspense. Does that make her mean, mean, mean? Well, then that would make all authors mean! lol. So how long has Kamile been there, and where is Everan? I don't believe he is dead. |
| For What Its Worth 2007-09-05 ch 9, | abuseNicely done, but is Kamile truly dead? |
| For What Its Worth 2007-09-02 ch 8, | abuseOh, no! You are going to update soon, right? So this queen figure is from the outside world? Everan can't really be gone, due to your other works. :) But where is he, and how hurt? They probably should go back to live with Pilori, also. |
| For What Its Worth 2007-08-31 ch 4, | abuseWhat happened to their parents? Have they ever known them? And if they have no parents, how do they survive? Their clothes may be ragged, but they actually have some...Do Piloris and Kayle help them out? It is truly in the nature of elves to act in such a manner toward orphans? And are they the only children to know telepathy? For you did mention the adults were speaking telepathically. Also, your sentences are sometimes too long. You may wish to rectify that. I really like this story. Update soon! |