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| jojoba-music-girl 2007-09-06 ch 1,  | abuseI like that it's a bit foggy. You seem to have chosen your words so well, that this has become so well worked out. Great poem, a bit odd, as you say so yourself, but that doesn't make this any less good! Keep it up! jojoba-music-girl |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2007-09-04 ch 1, | abuseThat was the most beautiful, heart-wrenching poem I have ever read. It dug deep into my soul to make me cry. Incredible, absolutely beautiful. ~the Stranger in the moonlight |
| All Alone With Her Thoughts 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseAnother amazing poem. (Who WOULD have thought? *rolls eyes*) Glad you're back to writing, which I really need to do...*sigh* Rowan. |
| A little birdie once told m... 2007-09-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou know, neither of us should be surprised that this is another one going on my favorites list. This is shockingly beautiful. When is someone going to officially recognize your talent! Grr! Unbelieveable as usual. Amazing work! |
| SirScott 2007-08-31 ch 1, | abuseThat was sad. Boys and girls pretty much cry over the same things. ~SirScott |
| apres moi le deluge 2007-08-31 ch 1, | abuseOkay, so this is pretty much awesome. I just couldn't wait to read the next line, and then the next... It's insanely good, and I'd be floored if I could pull off anything quite this amazing. |
| fairytale failure 2007-08-31 ch 1, | abuseFirst off, this is really, really good. You haven't wowed me like this in a while. I love the two stanzas right after 'i want to grow old with you', especially how you said 'the way his lips are meshed as If to hold back all the things he Wanted to tell her for the rest of her Life' and. 'with her head against his Heart like some absurd metaphor' also sounded really good. There were a few places where it didn't sound quite right; you could take out 'be' after what a man is supposed to. Another suggestion is take out the first 'but' in the line 'but nothing comes out but'. |
| changed.by.an.afterthought 2007-08-31 ch 1, | abusethis is a deliciously depressing and beautifully written poem. i love the innocent feel to it as u read and keep wondering where is this getting at? but it eventually becoems clear that it was obkivous since the beginning but u just didn't realize it (ifthat makes any sense cause to me it just barely doies)... slendid job. - changed |