this one was really great =)
very poetic

really enjoyed this.
it seems like the kind of story I could enjoy.
I think I picked up on an error toward the end; Jax says “About Aisha or the fact that you were about to choose me over school?”
is he suggesting that Carrie is remorseful of having been about to choose Jax over school, or was the intention for that to read 'choose school over me?'
I'm just letting you know, if it's the second after all, but this seems like a great story either way.

Oh my God, I love them!! THey're so cuute together ^^
I love the way you wrote this, it's amazing. I can't wait for any new chapters! You are now a favorite of mine ^^
~Chryssa

Those were adorable! You really get a glimpse of their lives in those sentences.

So cute! I really enjoyed them! I hope you write more!

Wow, I was pretty shocked to see twelve chapters up when I checked in today, haha! I suppose it's understandable, though, considering their lengths... But wow! Twelve chapters and it's still a favorite~

Oh, my God.

...I thought I hated her a few chapters ago and now I REALLY hate Jax's mother now. Seriously...kill her off or send her to Siberia or something.

I liked the no dialogue chapter. That had to be hard to write as I , myself, love writing dialogue. But like the all dialogue chapter, I think you handled this one well.

That would be neat; about putting him through a psychology class or two. I want to be a psychiatrist and I think any class would be a billion times better than my psych class right now. It's boring.

Looking forward to the next installment(s)!
:]

So, I was naughty and didn't review chapter six because I was busy with physics homework (Trig. I hate trig. Ugh) and I came back today with two new chapters! I was so excited. ^_^

Anyways, chapter six made me sad. :[ Chapter 7 I thought you wrote well. All dialogue chapters hard hard to write and I mean it when I say I think you wrote it well. Chapter 8...

I hate Jax's mom. What a skank. Psychology is awesome, so cookies/cake/brownies for you. haha. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapters and I'll try to throw my homework aside to review more consistently. :]

Oh wow. I just read every chapter you have up so far, and I'm smitten! I absolutely adore your characters-- for not having written much, you've certainly defined them in their own uniqueness very well. I've only occasionally found trips between first and third person perspectives (keeping in mind the different views you use with every chapter) and it's coming out to be a very fine array of short stories. I'm looking forward to a bit more on these two. I'll be waiting! :)

~M

Oh my God, I love this story so freaking much. :] I don't really have anything constructive to say (which I do apologize about), but I had to let you know how cute this is. Do keep writing more. =D

You might want to spell check this...and the whole thing of how you didn't want Cargans gender to be really specified until the end doesn't really work out..it's kind of obvious...But anyway, this is interesting.